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교정강사 Arah(C)
등록일 2021-10-20
작성글 What is the perfect number of children to have?
In my opinion, two of children is the best. We need about hundred thousand dollars to raise one child until he becomes an adult.
It is quite expensive. What's more, we need to prepare our lives after quitting our jobs.
So to live a satisfied and comfortable life, people recommend that we should raise the only one child.
However, if he is the only child in the family, it could be difficult for the child to get along with his friends or to care for others well.
I want my child to grow like a man who is very considerate. To stop him from being selfish, I let him have a friend, his sibling.
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What is the perfect number of children to have?

In my opinion, having two of children is the best. 

=> Corrected : The sentence is corrected grammatically. 

We need about hundred thousand dollars to raise one child until he becomes an adult. 

It is quite expensive. 

What's more, we need to prepare our lives after quitting our jobs. 

So to live a satisfied and comfortable life, people recommend that we should raise the only one child. 

However, if he is the only child in the family, it could be difficult for the child to get along with his friends or to care for others well. 

I want my child to grow like a man who is very considerate. 

To stop him from being selfish, I let him have a friend, his sibling. ​​

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