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제 목 The dragon of fortune 2
교정강사 Jaylou(C)
등록일 2021-12-08
작성글 So Gerenimo went to Bright Empire and found Mel the magaificent, Mel told him the ring was in wither's new cactle. So Geronimo left the thie castle with Mel's niece Wolfy. She find out the ring was in wither's room so they went to wither's room, and returned the ring! Luckly, he was just in time, so Blossom is still a queen! With Grace, you can make people feel happy and be friends with someone. And I thought, Grace is nice thing, so I should be Graceful, like God, he was Graceful to us and helped us so many times. I wish I can do something for him... I will try to be Graceful and nice to everyone.
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Geronimo went to Bright Empire and found Mel the magnificent, Mel told him the ring was in wither's new castle. Therefore, Geronimo left the the castle with Mel's niece Wolfy. She found out the ring was in wither's room so they went to wither's room, and obtain the ring! Luckily, he was just in time, so Blossom was still a queen! You can make people happy and be friends with anyone. And I thought, Being graceful is a nice thing, so I should be Graceful, like God, he was generous to us and helped us with so many times. I wish I can do something for him... I will try to be Graceful and nice to everyone. 

 

=> Corrected : The sentences are corrected grammatically.

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