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Time of Korean Revolution. |
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| 교정강사 | Lovely(D)O |
| 등록일 | 2022-09-20 |
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There was 4.19 Revolution in Korea. in 4.19 the president was Syngman Rhee. Syngman Rhee was a bad person. He just kiled many peoples and hurt them. He won 4 times at the president election. He just burned all vote papers to other person so he just won 4 times at the president election. So peoples was mad and they did a Revolution. |
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CORRECTIONS:
(Please use the complete date in writing paragraph.)
The president at that time was Syngman Rhee. Syngman Rhee was a bad person. He killed and hurt many people. (Be careful with the spelling.)
He won four times during the election. He burned all the vote papers that voted for other candidates that's why he won. For that reason, people got mad and made a revolution. (Be careful with the plural noun.)
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