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제 목 | The reason why do we need music. |
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교정강사 | Lovely(D)O |
등록일 | 2023-01-05 |
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We need music in our lives. Then why do we need music in our lives? First,music makes us feel comfortable or makes us exciting. Second we can't play any instruments. And Music training improves learning and memory. Like the piano |
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CORRECTIONS: We need music in our lives. First, music makes us feel comfortable or exciting. (Please be careful with the spacing and avoid redundancy of words.) Second, we don't have to play any instruments. ("Can't" is use when it's a skill you don't have. While "don't" is imperative.) Lastly, training music improves our learning and memories like piano.
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